rules against wordiness

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  • We sin: write the first thought, miss the best order, and then add is, was, of, by, to-be, there, there are, it is, which, who, whom.
  • Promote a noun into a verb.
  • Remove un-needed words (e.g. advance notice is notice, each separate incident is each incident).
  • Avoid passive voice (e.g. It has been decided that your draft…for) which sounds committee-ish.
  • Active voice is object-verb-subject (e.g. Joe was hit by the ball) NOT subject-verb-object (the ball hit joe).
  • Eliminate of’s and their nouns, change “which” clauses ...
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new year’s 2009 wish for you

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To All My Family, Friends, and Colleagues,

At some point in our lives, we all experience a time of disbelief. For 2009, I wish you belief.

In 2008, there were many people who believed in me, and, in both small and big ways, the belief changed my life. As well, I learned that my belief in others had helped them and changed their life. These two types of belief are what I wish for you in 2009.

Sometimes that ...

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celebrating freedom in the united states of america

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exposureworks

I’ve been wanting to write something the whole weekend and am glad that I waited. It’s not a show that I usually watch, but a group of people helped a marine who lost his leg in Iraq…they touched his life in a way that he could never repay…and did so with great humility and servitude. It was extremely touching.

It’s not every day that you get to experience life through ...

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